Commenting Guidelines

  • What was the small moment? How do you think the author felt about it?
  • What are two examples of “Show, don’t tell” that helped to create a vivid picture in your head?
  • What is one thing that would have helped you to understand the story better?
  • Any other comments? Favorite part? Great word choice? Ideas? Organization? Voice?

A Walk in the Woods

Arghhh! My cries echoed as my foot touched some loose dirt and I slid down the perilous hill. Hands grabbing at whatever tree roots I could, I finally came to a stop in a nice, squishy pile of black mud. Standing up, my jeans and coat covered in goo, I held my hands in front of my face and stared at the long, red scratches covering my hands. This was not going how I had planned! Oh well, I thought to myself, I have to keep moving. I stretched out my leg as I took one step, only to bring my foot down into a pool of icy water, with crystals forming around the edge.

Tears started to slide down my face as I realized this wasn’t working. I was cold, hungry and unhappy and all I wanted to do was go to my abode. Just then I saw Uncle Rich’s green and white truck racing up Erskine Road. He was cool! He’d help me get out of this mess!

As I raced through the trees toward the road, I tripped a few more times and suddenly came to a stop just a few meters inside the tree line. Uncle Rich had already passed in his truck! There was no way I was going to hitch a ride with him! I stomped my foot in frustration and started to realize how cold my feet really were.

I had to reevaluate my options. I could stay out here in the woods for a few more hours. I would make my point, but I would freeze and miss Thanksgiving dinner as well. Or…I could walk home, face the consequences, and end up with a belly full of turkey and Grandpa McGlew’s spicy pumpkin pie. I pondered the decision for only one second and began running toward home!

Welcome!

Welcome! The ASM 5th graders and teachers would like to invite you to share in our educational adventure by taking part in an exchange of ideas and experiences that will broaden our knowledge of the world: its past, its present, and the potential for its future!